Comments on: Bright Gems Amidst the Fog of Memory http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/2008/05/08/bright-gems-amidst-the-fog-of-memory/ ~writing on writing~ Thu, 19 Jun 2008 08:10:04 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: ~grace~ http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/2008/05/08/bright-gems-amidst-the-fog-of-memory/#comment-21 ~grace~ Fri, 09 May 2008 22:41:36 +0000 http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/?p=24#comment-21 oh dear, two readings? that's not good. thanks for letting me know! I am definitely open to critique, especially when phrased so nicely. :-) I tend to be a very "as-it-flows" writer, not so much with the revising thing. a writing teacher pointed this out to me once, too. you'd think I would learn, huh? thank you for coming by! oh dear, two readings? that’s not good. thanks for letting me know! I am definitely open to critique, especially when phrased so nicely. :-)

I tend to be a very “as-it-flows” writer, not so much with the revising thing. a writing teacher pointed this out to me once, too. you’d think I would learn, huh?

thank you for coming by!

]]> By: jerrywaxler http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/2008/05/08/bright-gems-amidst-the-fog-of-memory/#comment-20 jerrywaxler Fri, 09 May 2008 21:50:34 +0000 http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/?p=24#comment-20 Hi Grace, I don't remember either of these books but I like your writing tone - you have a lovely way of words falling out onto paper - very effective and engaging for me, the visitor and reader looking for a tiny window into someone's mind to pass a few moments, and not to mention maybe meeting someone and learning about writing. On Absolute Write you asked me to say what I thought, so I guess that opens the door to suggesting you edit just a bit to make it a little easier to follow you - that GWFHP thing took me TWO READINGS! I think a smidge of editing could have made it even more fun than it is. Jerry http://www.memorywritersnetwork.com/blog Hi Grace,

I don’t remember either of these books but I like your writing tone – you have a lovely way of words falling out onto paper – very effective and engaging for me, the visitor and reader looking for a tiny window into someone’s mind to pass a few moments, and not to mention maybe meeting someone and learning about writing. On Absolute Write you asked me to say what I thought, so I guess that opens the door to suggesting you edit just a bit to make it a little easier to follow you – that GWFHP thing took me TWO READINGS! I think a smidge of editing could have made it even more fun than it is.

Jerry
http://www.memorywritersnetwork.com/blog

]]> By: ~grace~ http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/2008/05/08/bright-gems-amidst-the-fog-of-memory/#comment-19 ~grace~ Fri, 09 May 2008 19:01:41 +0000 http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/?p=24#comment-19 ooooo that sounds cool. I love Bradbury. that would be so scary. *runs off to add a Bradbury book to her summer reading pile* thanks for stopping by, Marian! and I like how you remember the canary. THAT is the kind of detail I love. ooooo that sounds cool. I love Bradbury. that would be so scary.

*runs off to add a Bradbury book to her summer reading pile*

thanks for stopping by, Marian!

and I like how you remember the canary. THAT is the kind of detail I love.

]]> By: Marian http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/2008/05/08/bright-gems-amidst-the-fog-of-memory/#comment-18 Marian Fri, 09 May 2008 18:53:53 +0000 http://danceontherain.wordpress.com/?p=24#comment-18 The one about the doctor infecting everyone reminds me of a short story by Ray Bradbury called "Fever Dream", about a boy who's recovering from a mild sickness and who realizes that a far more sinister infection is taking over his body. He fights it, but at the end, he's a walking carrier without any will of his own. He shakes the doctor's hand, and hugs his parents and pets the canary. And waits eagerly to go back to school. Very scary idea. The one about the doctor infecting everyone reminds me of a short story by Ray Bradbury called “Fever Dream”, about a boy who’s recovering from a mild sickness and who realizes that a far more sinister infection is taking over his body. He fights it, but at the end, he’s a walking carrier without any will of his own. He shakes the doctor’s hand, and hugs his parents and pets the canary. And waits eagerly to go back to school.

Very scary idea.

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